(See text on page 14, Student's book MSC 4, for reference)
Imagine you want to post something on a message board on the Web. Write your text, and follow these points:
a) First paragraph
- Invent a character: name, age, city/country.
- Introduce yourself; say something about your family and pets, hobbies and interests...
b) Second paragraph
- Choose one of the teen topics (page 8) and explain why you are interested in it.
//When you finish, don't forget to sign at the end with your real name and class group//
24 comentarios:
Hi, my name is Dimitri and I from Kiev, in Ukraine. I´m 16 years old. I have got two brothers and one sister. I have got a dog too. It´s name is Bay and It´s a Beagle. I love football and my favourite football player is Toulalan.
I´m writting this message because in the world there are more people that they can´t eat everydays. Anyone helps poor countries and that is too bad. This situation can´t so continue, rich countries should help these countries. I hope that we can resolve this situation.
Dimitri, 11 october 2011
Raúl Rodríguez Fernández, 4ºB
Thank you Raúl for doing your extra homework. Anyway, as I said in class, you should revise your text carefully before entering the blog. Please compare your text before and after the corrections, and notice the silly mistakes you've made:
Hi, my name is Dimitri and I’m from Kiev, in Ukraine. I´m 16 years old. I have got two brothers and one sister. I have got a dog too. Its name is Bay and It´s a Beagle. I love football and my favourite football player is Toulalan. I´m writing this message because in the world there are many people who can´t eat everyday. Anyone helps the poor countries and that is too bad. This situation can´t continue that way, the rich countries should help these countries. I hope that we can solve this situation.
Hi, my name is Tom. I have 16 years of age. I have a little brother, loves music and sports. I live in London with my family and my turtle jack and likes sports. I like the King of Pop Michael Jackson.
I am writing this message because. I am interested in technology. I like computers, Internet surfing, chatting with friends. The world is computerized. informatics can control everything and that makes life easier. expects the technology evolves more
Juan B.Barroso Molina 4ºB
eHello. I'm Pilar.I'm 23. I live in Liverpool. I'm studying in a university. My universiy name University of federal Victory. I am finishing my career of medicic ene. I've got three brothers and two sisters. My father died for having cancer and my mother died in a traffic accident. In my house I have got much pets, I have got a two cats, a dog,a bird and two hamsters. I like pop music. I would to visit Oceanía.
In my opinion with the violence is never an optiion and with her it never comes near to any side.Many perons lose to his familys throught the fault of th violence and the war. I believe that the presidents should sit and talk instead of be criticizing and declare itself the war.
Marina Bueno Cabrera 4ºB
Hi Juan, thank you for your interest. I have corrected your text so that you can see where the mistakes were:
Hi, my name is Tom. I AM 16 years old. I have a little brother, and I LOVE music and sports. I live in London with my family and my turtle Jack (---).
I like the King of Pop, Michael Jackson.
I am writing this message because (--) I am interested in technology.
I like computers, SURFING THE Internet, chatting with friends. The world is computerized. Informatics can control everything and that makes life easier. I EXPECT (hope) that technology evolves more (AND MORE).
Hi Marina, thanks for your effort. I am reproducing your text about Pilar, but please take a look at the capital letters and make the comparisons (I will explain in class some of the vocabulary involved, e.g. the difference between CAREER / DEGREE):
Hello. I'm Pilar. I'm 23. I live in Liverpool. I'm studying AT THE FEDERAL VICTORY UNIVERSITY. I am finishing my DEGREE IN MEDICINE. I've got three brothers and two sisters. My father died OF cancer and my mother died in a traffic accident. In my house I have got A LOT OF (many) pets, I have got (--) two cats, a dog, a bird
and two hamsters. I like pop music. I would LIKE to visit Oceania.
In my opiniOn, (---) violence is never an OPTION, and with it YOU CAN’T GO ANYWHERE. Many PEOPLE (parents) lose THEIR FAMILIES BECAUSE OF VIOLENCE AND WAR. I believe that the presidents should sit and talk instead of (--) criticiZE and declare (--) the war TO ONE ANOTHER.
Hi! I'm Alice. I'm 18 years old. I live in Paris, France. I have one sister called Carol and one brother called Charlie. My mum's name is Anne and my father is called Louis. I have a little dog too, her name is Dina, she's still a puppy.
I love taking photos everywhere I go, it's a hobby for me. I love dancing too, it's amazing !
And now, I would talk about music. Music is a passion for me. I go to the conservatory of music for eight years and I think it's a very beautufil study. I play violin, flute and piano. I'd like to be a professional flutist. It's my goal now. And I can't be at home without music! I love it so much...
María López Lozano 4ºA
Claire
-1st post Thursday, 13th October
Hi, I’m Claire and this is my first message in this board so I’m going to tell you something about me. I’m 15 and I’m from New York but now I’m studying in Chicago. I’ve got a sister called Sophie and she’s 18. We’ve got two cats, Black and White, because they’re of these colours. I love travelling around the world. I visited places like Barcelona, Paris, London town, Ottawa…
I’m writing to this message board because I want to speak with somebody about the animal rights, and I think this is the best place. For me animals are very important because without animals in the world, I think we can’t live there. In the world there are a lot of scientists using the animals to do their investigations. It’s not fair. The animals have feeling too and they are livers like us. I think we can live with them without problems because they’re our friends. We had taken part in a demonstration about the animal right. There were a lot of people and it was incredible. I think this is good because this help to the people to see the importance of this. What do you think about this? Are you unanimously? What other thing we can do to defend the animals rights?
Kawtar Kechaf El Mezouri 4ºB
Well done, María/Alice. Apart from the correct spelling of the adjective 'beautiful' (don't care about that!), I would only change one of the tenses - I HAVE GONE to... for 8 years...
Brilliant work, you got ( ++ )
Great work, Kawtar/Claire. Taking care of the expression, sticking to the text on the book as a guide, using the topics and vocabulary from the unit. A very long and interesting second paragraph.
Notice the use of the Present Perfect in sentences like 'I HAVE VISITED places like...', or 'We HAVE TAKEN part in a demonstration...'
Compare these sentences with your own production:
- The animals have FEELINGS too, and they are LIVING CREATURES like us.
- This HELPS PEOPLE to see..
- Are you unanimous?
- What other THINGS CAN WE do...?
...You got ( + )
Hello! I'm Tina. I'm 17 years old, I'm from Cape Town in South Africa. Let me tell you something about myself. I hate maths but my sister Emily loves it. I like reading books and listening to music, but that I really love are animals. I have a cat called Mika and two dogs, Mickey and Tobby.
I'm very interested in animal rights. I love animals and I think that scientist are being cruel to animals, and it's not fair. I bought wristbands and I made posters to show people this cause.
Sandra Merino 4ºA
Hi Sandra/Tina. Thanks for participating in this message board. Your text is quite good, I only have two little things to tell you:
- WHAT I really love is... (Lo que de verdad me gusta es...)
- The agreement in "scientist are being cruel..." is wrong (SUBJECT singular - VERB plural).
. . . .
You chose to talk about ANIMAL RIGHTS (as Kawtar/Claire from New York did), but we are having different topics, which is very interesting: Raúl/Dimitri, from Kiev, chose THE DEVELOPING COUNTRIES- Juan/Tom, from London, chose TECHNOLOGY - Marina/Pilar, from Liverpool, talked about WAR AND TERRORISM - and María/Alice, from Paris, was interested in MUSIC.
Thank you all for your collaboration and your opinions!!
Hi , my name is Katy and I like writing on this board. Let me tell you something about myself. I'm sixteen years and I live in Peking, China. I have a brother and his name is Niso, he's twelve years. I have a dog too, his name is Toby and he is very little. I like listening to music , singing and dancing.
I'm interested in music because when I listen to music I feel very good and I can express all my emotions. My favourite singer is Lady Gagga and I like her modern clothes. When I was younger ,I sang in a Choir but I left it later because it was very expensive and one day I had a concert and the audience laughed off me. Since that day I decided that I will never sing more, only when my father play the piano in my house.
Sara Abecasis Barchilon 4ºA
Hi Sara/Katy. Thanks a lot for leaving your message on this board. I also love music (and for the same reasons!!).
Let us see how you can improve your writing:
- When talking about age, you can either say "I'm sixteen / he's twelve", or "I'm 16 years old / he's 12 years old", but you wrote "I'm sixteen years /he's twelve years", which is incorrect.
- "When I was younger I USED TO SING in a choir" would be alright, as it refers to habitual actions in the past.
- I decided that I WOULD never sing AGAIN, only when my father PLAYED...
- The audience laughed AT me.
...And that's all. See you in class!
Avigail
2nd post Friday, 29th November
Hello, my name is Avigail. Let me tell you something about myself. I'm 17 and I live in Berlin in Germany. I have got two sisters, Cameron (she is bigger than me) and Naomi. I have got a cat. My cat's name is Murphy. I like playing football with my sisters. I love the singer Jessie J.
I'm very interested in classical music, because I study ballet. I'm going to dance in Vienna, in Paris, in Madrid... I will be the best ballet dancer!
Do you love dance?
Mariola Sánchez López 4ºA
Hello Mariola/Abigail. You got ( + ) because your text is quite good.
- "She is OLDER than me" may be more appropriate.
- Consider "I will beCOME the best ballet dancer EVER !
(The correct spelling of the name is not Avigail, but ABIGAIL).
OK, see you in class !
Hey! I'm Lola and this is my first message on this board. Let me tell you something about myself.
I'm 10 and I live and study in London. I've got a brother, his name is Colin but he doesn't live at home with us, because he studies at Oxford University.
I live in a farm; I have two dogs, three cows and five pigs.
Ah! and Roussel, my horse. :)
I like going out with my friend and doing some exercise.
I'm writing this message board because I would like tell you something that happened to me last weekend.
I was playing tennis in a competition when Rafael Nadal came with a man, and sat down to see me!
When the match finished he called me, and told me if I would like to go to Spain to play tennis in the 'young promises´ club.
Rafa told me that he liked my tennis, and that if I trained in this club, I would probably be a famous tennis player!
But if I go to Spain..I will lose contact with my family.
I really don't know what to do!
But...I love sport for this emotions :)
Marta Salazar 4ºA
Hi Marta/Lola. You're very young but you already have a promising future as a tennis player. Well done! Have you told your parents about your meeting with Nadal? What do they think about it?
You should rewrite the following:
- I would like TO tell you...
- I would probably beCOME a famous tennis player!
- I love sport for THESE emotions.
Hello! I'm Barbie and this is my first message on this board. Let me tell you something about myself. I'm 18 years old, I live in Rome in Italy and I study in the Rome University. I've got two sisters and a small cat, my sister's names are Susan and Katya. I like pop music, my favourite group is McFly, and I love the Spanish actor Mario Casas.
I'm writing to this message board because I'm interested in fashion, I love skirts and jeans, but I hate dresses. I think fashion is very important because the clothes can tell the personality of the people. I love going shopping!!!
What clothes do you like? Are you interested in fashion? Why do you think fashion is important in the world?
Ana Martínez García, 4º A
Hi Barbie. I'm not Ken, but I have some pretty things to tell you. You have done the exercise exactly as I asked you to, and the only serious mistake in it has to do with the position of the possessive 's.
You should write "my sisters' names (not "my sister's names") are Susan and Katya", because it is plural (not singular), as there are two sisters.
Congratulations! You got ( ++ )
Hello. I'm Susi and this is my second message on this board. I go to tell something about me. I'm 14 years old, I live in Britain, I've got 2 brothers and 8 sisters, and we have a green and yellow parrot. My parrot's name is Perry. I like read and listen to music, and I love animals. I think that hourse is the best animal.
I'm writing to this message board because I'm very interested in sport. At the moment in the school we're doing volleyball in sport. I think volleyball is good but for me is very difficult because I don't know touch the ball.
Do you playing volleyball in your schools? What do you think about this?
PALOMA BARRERA DOMINGO, 4º A
Hello Paloma/Susi. Please take a careful look at the mistakes you've made:
- I'M GOING TO SAY something about me
- I like READING and LISTENING to music
- I think that THE HORSE is the best animal
- ...but IT is very difficult for me
- I don't know HOW TO touch the ball
- Do you PLAY volleyball in your schools?
Hi, I'm Jess and this is my first message on this board. Let me tell you something about myself. I'm 13 and I live in Vancouver in Canada. I've got three sisters and a brother. I've got a giant turtle whose name is Manuela. I like pop music but I don't have any favourite pop groups because I enjoy any kind of music.
I'm writing on this wall because I love acting since I was a very young child. I have always bee in theaters, and my dreams are to be on a professional stage. I would like you could give me advice or also information about possible castings in the next.
Do you think that I have any possibility?
ELENA GONZÁLEZ PAVÍA, 4º A
Hi Elena/Jess. So you want to become an actress, don't you? Well, if you want to try to succeed in Hollywood you can't do without English, so please take a careful look at the mistakes you've made:
- I have always BEEN in theatres
- My DREAM IS to be...
- I would like YOU TO give me SOME advice
-...information about THE NEXT (possible) castings
-...any POSSIBILITIES?
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